Audience essay feedback and learner response

 1) Copy and paste your feedback from the email in full - WWW, EBI and LR.

WWW-This is thoughtful well developed essay with a lot of detail and multiple accurate use of media terminology well done 

EBI-Some issues like not using capital letters for brands and industry names. Need to develop more about disadvantages

LR-See blog. Re-write Newspapers paragraphs and give examples of fake news

2) What was the word count for your essay?
512

3) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others?
my introduction because i describe it in every detail

4) What was your weakest paragraph? Why do you think it wasn't as good as others?
news papers because i didn't give examples.

5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in future?
write more 
give more disadvantages 

6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience and industry from completing this essay.
that the internet changes lives.

The print industry which supplies the people with media and news for example the Daily Mirror. There are some disadvantages to this like fake news such as the USA election 

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